tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8293915950206651931.post7869946984294576535..comments2023-10-15T06:53:16.265-07:00Comments on Alana Taylor BTEC Media Blog 2014: TV Advertisement Evaluation.Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11317900243677073646noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8293915950206651931.post-73203676787497026612015-02-11T05:37:01.094-08:002015-02-11T05:37:01.094-08:00Alana,
I can see that you have put a lot of thoug...Alana,<br /><br />I can see that you have put a lot of thought and effort into your reflection on the advert and it's inception. You have covered everything required and you have written about some well-chosen moments from the adverts and pieces of audience feedback.<br /><br />For me, the biggest issue is your phrasing; often I will read a section and not really understand it. I wonder if you try to use difficult language that doesn't always fit. Keep it simple - you can get the highest marks with easy to understand simple language as long as you define terms clearly, explain them clearly and use clear examples. Your chosen examples are great but there is no evidence to back them up.<br /><br />To improve:<br />- proof read your work and check that it all makes sense<br />- embed the advert at the top<br />- embed your questionnaire / type up your questions<br />- add evidence (screenshots from your ad and feedback) throughout when you make a point<br />- break long paragraphs of text up (it's hard to read).<br /><br />EllieBMediaElliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04832292410962599708noreply@blogger.com